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Much better now
After looking over this page further, I've decided to trash it and start over. Overall the page is very weak. It's an improvement over the old one, but it's misses various key requirements. I'll move it to scraps later.
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I really love this page! It's a huge improvement from your old one. The only real problems I can really see with this are in the second and third panels.
Sonic's fist is a bit off. When you make a fist, your fingers should be curled up over the palm and your thumb resting on top of them below the knuckle. Unless you meant for him to be in the process of balling his fist up. I'm also not sure his ears tilting comes off right, but I'm hesitant to say that. I think the problem I have with it is that Sonic's head looks a bit... bald, without his ears sticking up. Also, hedgehogs don't use their ears to express emotions like cats and dogs do. I think it'd looks great on say, Fiona there, but I'm not not sure on Sonic. That's your choice though.
In the third panel, the shading is imbalanced. There's a blank spot in the upper left corner, which in combination with the lack of any solid black in any part but the lower right throws off the panels balance. Adding more shading to the tree would help that.
Other than that, the entire page looks great overall. It's got nice flow to it, and your expressions are excellent. Scourge's body language really shows off his cockiness, I love it. I also love Sonic's face in the last panel, though I agree with PidgeonPen in that his lower eyelid could be raised a bit. It'd help pull off the glare. This could help his face in the second panel, too.
Really great work, though! I think with a bit of tweaking it could be a page in the actual comic.